© Fatima Fakier Deria
Cape Town, 1963
Omar clutched the rails of the SS Trekker, peered down on the bustle of people below. Fishmongers marketed their wares amongst the tearful. Prices and goodbyes mingled in the salty air. Only one of Omar’s twelve brothers came to see him off. The others obliged to their jobs. He waved at Omar now, smiled, then dug his hands into his pockets. He looked about him cutting a lonely figure in the crowd.
Skeeter Davis sang sweet melancholy from a nearby radio somewhere. Omar’s heart squeezed, then beat faster. London seemed like the edge of a big wide world.
100 words
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Written for my fave flash fiction Friday Fictioneers, hosted by Rochelle. Challenge yourself to write a story in 100 words or less. Click to view more flash fiction here.
Thank you Rochelle for using my photo of Cape Town harbour, for this week’s prompt! So chuffed!
A neat evocation of the place and the period, Fatima
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Thank you Neil. My dad left Cape Town for London on a ship too, around the same time. This story echoes what his experience might have been.
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Dear Fatima,
“Why does my heart go on beating? Why do these eyes of mine cry?…” You put that song in my head. Lovely and well described tribute to your dad. Thank you for the photo this week.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Well I hope you like the song Rochelle, if it is now stuck in your head. 🙂 My parents’ stories of their youth sounded so extraordinary to me. Still do. Thank you for using my photo!
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I didn’t even have to click the link to hear the song. It was one of my favorites…still is. It sounds as if you heard some great stories from your parents. 😀 Thank you for sharing a snippet of one. I enjoyed it very much.
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Lovely write. Thanks for the prompt pic.
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Thank you!
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Goodbyes can be such heart-ripping events…
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Oh they certainly can. Thank you Magaly.
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Beautifully written story.
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I appreciate that. Thank you
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A fine tribute to all who have left there homeland and sailed to a new world
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Thank you Michael 😊
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This was beautifully written, Fatima! And I, too, love that song… goes so very well with your words!
Thank you (again) for your picture!
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Thanks for your thoughtful comments Dale. It is a great song. And you’re welcome for the photo too😊
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You captured the sense of worry and anxiety about leaving your homeland well here
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Thank you Michael. I’m glad it came across 😊
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Thank you for the lovely prompt! It triggered a lot of thoughts in me. A lovely and a moving story.
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You’re welcome! I’m happy you liked it. Thank you for reading and for your wonderful comments too.
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My pleasure!
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Emotions were well portrayed and the surroundings too. Great read!
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Thank you Ajay! I’m pleased you enjoyed reading it. 😊
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