Goodnight kiss

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He shut the closet door and sank into the darkness. Mark clasped his hands over his ears to silence the buzzing. But he was helpless against the visions that replayed in his mind.

Blood. On a single gold hoop earring. Matted brown hair. He tasted bile in the back of his throat.

Three days later his wife’s body was found near the beach and he was arrested. The detective presented the evidence bag containing the stained earring they found in his car. Nausea enveloped him as he tried to remember. He had kissed her goodnight. But after that – nothing.

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I struggled with this image. Everytime I tried to think of something, all I could see was crinoline… Probably because I had read Rochelle’s post first.

So I went back to my thriller roots, and saw jewellery instead in those suspended circular artwork things. I’m not sure if my main MC is guilty or not. Looking forward to seeing your thoughts in the comments. Thank you, Dale Rogerson, my friend, for this week’s image!

Written for Friday Fictioneers hosted by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields. The challenge is to write a story in 100 words or less. Click the blue frog icon to read more flash fiction from other super cool writers.

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24 thoughts on “Goodnight kiss

    1. Yep. Unreliable narrators are a trend bordering on the cliched but I guess that depends on the outcome of the story. Thank you for your feedback and for reading, Luccia. 😊


    1. Intoxication is a possible explaination. I watched one thriller series where drugs was definitely involved in the amnesia. However the ending turned out to be an accident rather than murder. But they covered it up and so that’s where the crime lies I suppose. Thank you, Larry.

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    1. That’s exactly it and we’ll be fed the information a little at a time. Sometimes it will look as if he’s guilty and other times gives one hope that he’s innocent. Thanks Neil.


      1. Not at the moment. But I love thriller plots. They drip the information and totally mislead you. Which is a good skill for creating mystery in any novel. I’m writing a novel that has murder in it. But not quite a thriller, though it has thriller elements. I call it gen fic.


  1. I rather think he didn’t do it, because his memory loss starts at the moment he kisses her good night. They were presumably at home, so if he’d killed her there would be forensic evidence of the crime in the house. But the body is found near the beach, with forensic evidence in the car.
    Now, it’s possible that he’s an extremely clever murderer who sees that amnesia after he’s kissed her goodnight gets him out of all sorts of difficulties with possible witnesses seeing him in the car etc, but most murderers aren’t that clever. Their lie would leave as little time unaccounted for as seems realistic.
    But, could be either on the evidence you present!

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    1. Ah I can expect another thriller writer to give such detail. You’ve almost written the entire plot there! 😊
      In thrillers it’s always that there is damning evidence but could easily have been planted there too or end up a million other ways. Other considerations would need to be accounted for such as time etc.. as you have pointed out. I don’t know though, he could maybe only remember that much. Or be confused with another memory maybe? Thank you, Penny. This was fun.

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    1. You bring up a good point. Perhaps arrested, then released by some loophole by his clever lawyer. Though now it is a race against time, to prove his innocence, or find out he is guilty. Does that work maybe?


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