PHOTO PROMPT © Karen Rawson
He gazed at the delicate line of her neck, tracing with his eyes along her collar-bone.
“Josh, are you listening?” Carrie cocked her head to one side, blue eyes sparkling, blonde hair flowing with the breeze.
“Huh? What were you saying?” He slipped his hand into his pocket.
“So you always come here?” she looked at the bubbling creek, and bare trees.
“It’s better in the spring.” He tried not to think of the other women.
She shivered. “It’s cold.”
He drew a blade from his pocket. Only the trees heard her screams, but they would never tell.
98 words
Written for Friday Fictioneers hosted by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields. Write a story in 100 words or less. Thanks to Karen Rawson for this week’s prompt which inspired me to write my thriller-date-gone-horribly-wrong flash fiction.
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Brutal, I wonder if her question about him always going there implies previous victims… Chilling.
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Ha! We were commenting on each other’s posts at exact same time! 🙂 His thoughts about other women implies the same serial-killer background.
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Hmmm, other women implies this has been done before…
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Our man here has a dodgy past for sure.
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Some lovely writing there, Fatima
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Thank you, Neil! 🙂
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You’ve written this very skilfully, with nice foreshadowing at the beginning, and some description that shows Carrie is attractive and enlists our sympathy for her. The denouement is suitably brutal.
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I have to thank the word count for the brutality of the denouement. Any extra words and I may have continued unnecessarily. I’m glad you could connect with Carrie in so few words. Thank you, Penny.
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Yikes – that was very chilling! Nicely done.
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Thank you, Susan! Chilling was what I was aim for.
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This picture sure has brought out the killer. And yours was quite cool about the whole thing. Poor girl has no clue.
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I blame TV shows for associating this image with killers in our minds. On another level, it could be quite serene. Yes, my MC is very sure of himself.
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Chilling. Great twist.
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Thank you, Lisa. 🙂
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Chilling!
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Thank you, Dahlia.
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Really chilling take on the picture. He’s done this before then.
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He definitely has had practice over the years!
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Another one bites the dust – or mud in her case!
My FriFic tale is called Solace!
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Ha! Poor girl.. Thank you, Keith.
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Dear Fatima,
That was brutal. Dare I say, nicely done?
Shalom,
Rochelle
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You may dare away in this case 😉 Thank you, Rochelle.
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Very effective. He sounds practised at his art.
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An art only he appreciates. Thank you, Sandra.
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Not quite the rendezvous she was expecting – or many before her!
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Aaagggh! Three homicidal maniacs in a row! All spooky, all scary, all really well written:)
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