PHOTO PROMPT © Sandra Crook
The call came in the dark hours of the morning. Doctor Worthington drove in the pre-dawn winter mist to the abandoned train station.
He found Matthew waiting for him, grumbling as he looked about nervously, “Hurry, we don’t have much time.”
“Sorry. Came as soon as you called.” He tried to match Matthew’s brisk pace as they walked to a discarded carriage. They pried open the rusty doors. Inside, a corpse laid flaccidly on black plastic sheets on the floor. It still looked pink-fresh. Hours old maybe.
“You have ten minutes, doctor. Harvest everything.”
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Talk about a side-hustle for this doctor!
Written for Friday Fictioneers hosted by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields. Write a story in 100 words or less. Click the frog to submit your story.
A great take on the prompt! Loved it! ❤
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Delighted that you enjoyed it, and thanks for reading.
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🙂 ❤
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That was a great twist at the end
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Thank you, Neil.
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Dear Fatima,
Wow, that wasn’t at all what I was expecting. Well done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Thank you, Rochelle.
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Fantastic story! I have a vision of the doctor ripping and slashing to get to the organs!
Well done!!!
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Ripping and slashing in a hurry! Thank you, Darnell.
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Wow, wasn’t expecting that! Hope he is at least going to put the organs to good use!
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They will be sold on the black market, unfortunately for illegal organ transplants.
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I bet they’ll sell for a good price on the open market.
Just a bit of critique, I noticed you used the word “abandoned” twice. Once in regard to the station and again describing the carriage. You might consider substituting another word in one of these places. Just a thought.
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Crikey! I did. Thank you, Russell for that feedback. I’ll do that.
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Discarded was a perfect fit.
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Absolutely loved that twist. Brilliant!
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Thank you!
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Excellent story! And a twist in the tale.
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Thank you, Sandra.
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A brilliant take Fatima – I certainly did not expect that ending!
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Interesting twist to the prompt. Murder on the train.
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Hours old? There won’t be much worth harvesting.
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Hahaha true! Maybe that’s why they’re in a hurry…
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Well that did not go where I thought it would
Oh my!!!
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Now, I want to know what he’s doing with these organs. Black market? Saving his sister who desperately needs a kidney? Feeding them to his pet iguana? Hosting a feast for cannibals? Intriguing.
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Clever story. We always associate doctors with healing, but of course a few of them go over to the dark side, and that’s so unusual that it makes your twist very powerful. What makes it even better is the way the setting – time and place – prepares us emotionally for the twist.
Nice write!
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Ooo, gruesome undercurrents here. Nicely done.
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I like how you built the tensions, a Doctor a body and possibly still alive to be saved – than wham. Reminds me of the Burke and Hare murders in Edinburgh, but here we have a delivery by train – nice.
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Ooo I want more. Fantastic twist!
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Gruesome! You just never know….
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That was a shock. I was totally misled and totally surprised at the twist in the end of this. Well told.
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No wonder the doctor took all the trouble to drive on a dark chilly morning!
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Great twist, Fatima! I wasn’t expecting that. A very cleaver story.
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In the midst of life, huh. Good story, Fatima.
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Great twist.
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