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“I can’t believe you bought this. Are you trying to sink us?”
There was a time when she used to love everything I did.
“It’s seen better days.” Things have not been the same between us since…. “I’m trying to move us forward.”
“Okay, I get it. Roller shutter doors are not conventional coffee shop decor. But that’s what will be so great about it. Think industrial. Like an upmarket New York loft. Nothing a coat of paint won’t fix.
“Some things can’t just be covered up and forgotten about, Elliot. Some things can’t be fixed. ”
Written for Friday Fictioneers hosted by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields. Write a story in 100 words or less. Click the blue frog to submit your flash fiction, and read others’.
12 thoughts on “Hitting the nail on the head”
Oh, ye of little faith. This could be just what they need – or not!
Here’s my story!
Oh I don’t know. I an age where truth can be upcycled and repurposed, he may have a point
In this relationship, one is trying to fix it. The other is not. Only the two together can repair it. Let’s hope they do. – good story –
I really like this story, Fatima. The metaphor in which the derelict building represents the couple’s relationship is a powerful and economical way of describing the hurt felt by the woman and the superficial understanding of this held by Elliot.
“You just don’t get it, Elliot!”
I’m not sure if the negative attitude is valid or realistic. Either way, they don’t seem keen on the investment. Good story.
She’s right. Some things just can’t be fixed.
Well… if both are not willing to participate, they are doomed…Let us hope he can get her enthused….
Love the metaphor here, and the fact things can not be covered up and forgotten.
A bit of a heart-breaker. You leave me wondering what has happened. Nicely written.
Well-written, understated tale. You show us the precarious state of their relationship without spelling it out, and I can’t help wondering how things will work out for them.
Oh…. there is something really bad that has happened… better part now.
They have moved apart. Things will be difficult to fix. Someone has to make the adjustment.