Hitting the nail on the head

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“I can’t believe you bought this. Are you trying to sink us?”

There was a time when she used to love everything I did.

“It’s seen better days.” Things have not been the same between us since…. “I’m trying to move us forward.”

She sighed.

“Okay, I get it. Roller shutter doors are not conventional coffee shop decor. But that’s what will be so great about it. Think industrial. Like an upmarket New York loft. Nothing a coat of paint won’t fix.

“Some things can’t just be covered up and forgotten about, Elliot. Some things can’t be fixed. ”

98 words

Written for Friday Fictioneers hosted by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields. Write a story in 100 words or less. Click the blue frog to submit your flash fiction, and read others’.



12 thoughts on “Hitting the nail on the head

  1. I really like this story, Fatima. The metaphor in which the derelict building represents the couple’s relationship is a powerful and economical way of describing the hurt felt by the woman and the superficial understanding of this held by Elliot.
    “You just don’t get it, Elliot!”


  2. Well-written, understated tale. You show us the precarious state of their relationship without spelling it out, and I can’t help wondering how things will work out for them.


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